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Do you think young peole are more or less fit than 50 years ago? (why/ why not)

In my opinion, young people are getting more obese over time.
Account
Suggestion
Accountable
 for the development of the world, fast food which contains harmless additive and has high in fats, is increasing alternately. It is more and more good taste and smell, as well as its appearance that makes us
hungrier
Suggestion
hungry
 and
finally
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 we put it into our mouth.
Consequently
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, people
are easily gain
Suggestion
easily gain
are easily gaining
have easily gained
 weight nowadays.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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