IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

Some universities now offer their course on the internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

#universities #offer #course #internet #people #study #development
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
It is claimed that internet-based learning is becoming increasingly popular in many universities. From my perspective, while there are several drawbacks to
this
Linking Words
 trend, it is overall a desirable development. There are some disadvantages to the trend that online courses are being offered to people by universities. For one, there will be less direct interaction between students and others
such
Linking Words
 as their peers or their teachers, which is normally seen in traditional courses.
In other words
Linking Words
, by staying in front of computers, students may have no chance to discuss their subjects with other students and be provided direct support from their professors.
Therefore
Linking Words
, online learners are likely to lack some basic skills
such
Linking Words
 as teamwork that face-to-face group brings. Another drawback is that computers are expensive to maintain. To provide adequate and convenient courses for numerous users, universities must have a good
servers
Suggestion
server
 or websites that allow learners to access to whenever they want, which often costs a
number
Suggestion
amount
 of money to maintain. Despite the above arguments, I would maintain that online university courses are a positive development. It must
first
Linking Words
 be recognised that internet-based education facilitates leaners to studying whenever and wherever they want.
For example
Linking Words
, as the
covid
having or marked by a curve or smoothly rounded bend
curved
carved
-19 pandemic is extraordinarily widespread, students now can stay at home to study without being exposed to
this
Linking Words
 virus.
In addition
Linking Words
 to
this
Linking Words
, online courses offer more diverse methods of learning
such
Linking Words
 as brainstorming or game-based learning on applications provided on the internet. As a consequence, it is accessible to a wide range of users who want learning methods that meet their needs. In conclusion, while it is true that there are some drawbacks of online university courses, it is my belief that it is overall a positive development.
Submitted by Andy on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: