There are people who suffer from poverty in every country. What do you think the reasons for poverty are in your country and what do you think can be done to help these impoverished people?

#people #poverty #country

Nowadays, some people are poor even in the developed country. In

this

essay, I will consider the reasons of people is

lack

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the lack

money

and provide some solutions to help these people. In many well developed countries, we can

also

see some people live in poverty. The one reason of

this

issue is the

education

, not everyone can reach the highest qualified.

For example

, I know some of the

student

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students

just graduated from secondary school and did not keep

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going

on to achieve the tertiary

education

as a result

, they are more likely less job opportunities which

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are

in a high

pay

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paying

salary.

Moreover

, the another cause of

this

problem is the uneven distribution of the wealth. People who holding a quantity of

money

are likely to earn more and more

money

For instance

, they have a knowledge to know how

to make

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making

money

faster,

consequantly

(sentence connectors) because of the reason given

consequently

, rich people become more rich and poor people become much poor.

However

, there are some solutions.

Although

som

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some

high

pay

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paying

jobs which is

need

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needed

a higher

education

qualified, but there is some jobs is just need a skilled are

also

in a

good

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well

better

paid salary,

such

as, electrical worker, carpenter

Accept space

gardener and so on. These jobs just need the related experience or vocational certificate, so the student who

can not

cannot

reach the tertiary level are

also

can achieve these kind of jobs.

Additionally

, governments should set a law for citizens who earn too much

money

to increase their

tax

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taxes

This

can make people who earn not much

money

to pay a lower

tax

for support their living cost, and the

tax

income from the wealth people can allocate to help

the low income family

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lower income families

lower income family

. In conclusion,

nonetheless

the issue of the pove

rty

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has

have an impact on our city,

however

, there have some solution to solve

this

problem by governments to increase the rich people's

tax

and citizens

who can

can not

cannot

not achi

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higher

gher

education

can do some skilled jobs

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