There are people who suffer from poverty in every country. What do you think the reasons for poverty are in your country and what do you think can be done to help these impoverished people?

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Nowadays, some people are poor even in the developed country. In

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the lack

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and provide some solutions to help these people. In many well developed countries, we can

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see some people live in poverty. The one reason of

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issue is the

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, not everyone can reach the highest qualified.

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, I know some of the

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students

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going

on to achieve the tertiary

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, they are more likely less job opportunities which

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paying

salary.

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, the another cause of

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problem is the uneven distribution of the wealth. People who holding a quantity of

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are likely to earn more and more

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, they have a knowledge to know how

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making

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faster,

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, rich people become more rich and poor people become much poor.

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, there are some solutions.

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qualified, but there is some jobs is just need a skilled are

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in a

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well

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paid salary,

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as, electrical worker, carpenter

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gardener and so on. These jobs just need the related experience or vocational certificate, so the student who

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can achieve these kind of jobs.

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, governments should set a law for citizens who earn too much

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to increase their

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taxes

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can make people who earn not much

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to pay a lower

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for support their living cost, and the

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income from the wealth people can allocate to help

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lower income families

lower income family

. In conclusion,

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the issue of the pove

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have an impact on our city,

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, there have some solution to solve

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problem by governments to increase the rich people's

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and citizens

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higher

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can do some skilled jobs

yeahkubiMon Aug 17 2020

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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324 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Economic Disparities
Unemployment
Underemployment
Education Inequality
Healthcare Inequality
Financial Instability
Cost of Living
Social Welfare Programs
Government Policy
Geographic Disparities
Development
Infrastructure
Steady Income
Basic Needs
Cycle of Poverty

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