Many working people get little or no exercise Either during the working day Or in their free time And have health problems as a result. Why do working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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In modern times, upgrading

standard

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the standard

of living is becoming a culture.

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is because globalisation is at its peak creating opportunities for everyone to earn a livelihood.

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created opportunities does not spread awareness about sharing household

resposibilities

the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force

responsibilities

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attitude may be untrue in some of the developed countries, but it is a definite case in a

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world country like India.In my essay, I will elaborate specific case for working women in India

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explaining reasons for the drifted focus on exercise

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due to lack of time. At the same-time, I will suggest a solution to overcome

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a plight of women. India has been recently evolved as a country providing equal opportunities for women as men.Even though

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it does not lessen the responsibility of household chores

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which makes her living extremely stressful, resulting in health related issues.

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free-time is occupied with either

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child

care or additional task which she could not complete during weekdays.All

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adds up to concentrate on managing daily routine and losing focus on workouts.Time management is becoming a problem because she is burdened without anyone to share. It becomes extremely difficult to voice her concern as she is meant to feel obliged that she

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at least

have an opportunity to consider her career. Above mentioned issue can be solved by changing men's attitude she is surrounded with. Spreading awareness amongst men about how crucial it is to support in household chores will

apparantely

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enable a

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woman

to focus on exercising with a healthy mind. In my opinion

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women will be able to prioritise her task and maintain a balance between work, house and health with men's

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an active diversion requiring physical exertion and competition

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Time constraints
Sedentary lifestyle
Passive leisure activities
Workplace wellness programs
Active commuting
Subsidized
Public awareness
Health benefits
Incentivizing
Accessible public spaces

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Many working people get little or no exercise Either during the working day Or in their free time And have health problems as a result. Why do working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Fully explain your ideas

today’s digital age, anyone with a smartphone can capture and share photographs. This accessibility to photography diminishes the value of professional photographers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays online shopping is extremely popular. Discuss the impact of it on the environment and on people who lost their jobs because of it.

In many countries, men and women are working full-time. It is therefore logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measure do you think might be effective?

Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventive measure. To what extent do you agree or disagree?