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Some people think that new technology always improves the lives of workers. Other people believe that it results in disadvantages for workers. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Developing of the new
technology
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 is increasing rapidly and that affects people's lives. According to some it has a positive influence to employees, but the others think that there are more drawbacks. In my view,
technology
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 improves not only working environment, but
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 everyday lives. On the one hand,
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 development,
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 as computers, phones and automation has led to the enormous rise in the worker's productivity and efficiency.
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, a number of tasks like calculations and analysis now, can be done with the simple click button.
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, the advancement in communication made not only employees' lives easier, but change the whole companies functioning. The video call option has minimized the face to face meetings,
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 travel time has reduced to the minimum for workers,
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 they have more time for their families.
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, many people feel
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. They think that
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 has made their work lives harder than it was before. Limited human interaction is the main disadvantage.
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, people believe that
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 development affects their personal lives as well, using mobile phones and other devices blurs the line between professional and private lives.
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, online communication is faster it makes people working all the time.
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, in my opinion, I believe that new
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 has a positive result in a working environment. It definitely is a benefit for employees who knows how to separate personal and business lives. In conclusion, as many issues,
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 has its benefits and drawbacks in places of work.
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, I think that it lets people do their jobs faster, more efficient and
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 the main merit.
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