Some people think that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters such as food, clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decision about matters that affect them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, children are expected to make their own decisions. Some people support the idea that when children make their own decisions, it will make them
narcissist people
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narcissist, people
, while others think that it is necessary to let them decide themselves because it will have positive impacts.
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essay supports that it is important to let them decide themselves. When children make their own decisions, they will be able to see the results of their choices and that will make them think about if it was a true or wrong decision.
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has a chance to impact them negatively as well because if they ignore the results,
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they will think that they are doing good and want to continue in that way.
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is why the majority of parents think that they should decide for their children
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of children making choices for themselves. A study done in Moncton University indicated that children who were always able to do what they want when they were little become narcissist individuals at the end.
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, when they are able to make their own choices,
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they will be much more experienced and more successful than the children who were not able to decide themselves in the long run. The reason for
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is when they make wrong choices,
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they will learn lessons from that choice and try to not do it again. Most of the famous
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owners had a childhood that they could make their own decisions and walk in that way.
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, Steve Jobs. When he decided to open a computer
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with his friend Steve Wozniak, his family and friends said that it is a wrong choice for his future, but he did not listen to them and opened his
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, after a while it became the most known computer
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in the world. So, when they are able to make their own decisions, it can be beneficial for them. To sum up, when they decide themselves, it might result badly, but
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it can
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make them better individuals. I believe that parents should let them make their own choices, but have to help them if they are doing wrong.
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