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People today generall have better lives than people in the past did. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It’s often said that People who live in a modern age today always get a better
life
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 conditions than in the past had before
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 I agree with
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 view, but there still have some reason to say that the opinion which has been mentioned on
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 topic is not completely true for all of the situations. At
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, Talk about the facilities that we have today from school equipments
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medical theory to modern technology
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It
 is obvious that they’re more convenient than in the past.
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, nowadays if you want to send a letter or to talk with someone who live far away, you just need a click and send an email to them or just make a phone call.
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Moreover, there
 were many diseases that people in the past did not have the treatment
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 but in
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 high-tech medical age, it is easy to get a good treatment for these diseases
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 there is some of that right now
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 do not have the treatment.In addiction, present-day, we
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 have many beneficial equipments which support for our study stage.
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because of The improvements of our
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modernizations in many majors like education
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technology
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medical,… that leading to the destruction of the environment of the earth.To construct modern buildings, it’s obvious that we have to cut down
tree
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a tree
the tree
trees
 to get the materials
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to exploit many other minerals, which is destructing our natural environment, and that cause the greenhouse effect and the heating of our planet. In conclusion, I believe that nowadays we absolutely have a better
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 than in the pa
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t,but there are some aspects that we have to tack
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e,advance to make our
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 more and more effective
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