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13. Some people feel that courses can make anyone a teacher, while others feel an excellent teacher cannot be made by pursuing a course. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #courses #anyone #teacher #course
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Education is compulsory for acquiring any profession. It is said by some individuals that if anyone wants to become
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teacher
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a teacher
then
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 he /she must do some courses
,
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,
while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 believe that it is not essential to do studies in order to become
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teacher
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a teacher
teachers
.In my perspective, it is important to do any
course
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 in order to become a successful
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teacher but
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teacher, but
 I will elaborate both viewpoints in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, it is mandatory to opt any
course
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 because in those courses people learn about the ways and techniques of tackling different situations in classrooms and they are guided by very experienced and talented teachers.For instance, in bachelor of education individuals get a chance to study different subjects like psychology, philosophy and they are
also
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 encouraged to participate in debate and discussions which boost their confidence.Another reason is that all the academic institutes
demands
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demand
 teaching courses for giving jobs to people.
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, some people have contradictory viewpoints
.
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.
They believe the its not compulsory to do any
course
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 if anyone wants to become
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teacher
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a teacher
teachers
.To illustrate, some individuals who do not have money starts taking
tutions
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuitions
tuition
 at home without doing any
course
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.A well known person named Harbans
singh
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Singh
 was the famous
teacher
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 of Punjab and he had made many records for his teachings. He Had started his
carrier
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
 by teaching
tutions
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuitions
at
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in
 his home. To recapitulate
,
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,
 I would like to write that teaching
course
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 is
effective way
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an effective way
 to improve the teaching skills of people
.
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.
so
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So
 people should do
teaching
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a teaching course
course
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 if they want to become successful teachers.
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