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Some people think that secondary or high school student should be taught how to use money management as an important life skill, do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 contemplate era, people usually are aware about the ways to earn money but proper utilisation is equally important to thrive in the society as A few people argue that
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 wealth
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 should be taught at the higher level of education as an considering factor because of
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 by being completely agreed to the statement will discuss the points in the essay below. To start with, the grown up young generation is more concerned about the present rather than
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future, therefore
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, By watching their age mates they have raised the standards for their living and it
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 increased their spending. They generally believe to live in today by accepting the culture of five days working and spending each their penny in the weekends. They believe in the era of caring less, spending more which in turn leaves no amount of money to them for their
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 use or for any misfortune.
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,
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 is unpredictable their could be any need of funds at any stage of life if funds
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 education will be provided to the students they will be more aware about the circumstances they can face
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, if a person is not happy with his job and want to open up his own bussiness he would require a large amount of money which he can arrange only if he had managed his funds in a proper way
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, their could
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 be health issues which can not be ignored or for any medical treatments their would be need of funds these things are only possible if their will be a proper balance between the income and expenses of a person. To recapitulate, the fund
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 is very important as it enhances the power to face
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 uncertain events and it is only possible if a person will be well educated about the wealth
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 only
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 he can maintain an appropriate balance between his spendings and savings.
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