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Many today feel that most urgent problems can only be solved by international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are various social, economic, cultural problems in India. It is suggested by some individuals that urgent problems can only be saved by international cooperation. In my perspective, most difficult issues of the world can only be solved by the joint efforts of all the nations.
To begin
 with, some of the problems like war and any disease
can not
can not
cannot
 be tackled by any single individual nation.
For instance
, these days new virus named corona has
arrived which
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arrived, which
 has changed the life of people almost everywhere. Everyone is stuck in their country
.
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.
International flights have been suspended for a while
.
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.
Many people have died due to
this
 epidemic in all the countries
.
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.
All the nations are jointly working on vaccinations
.
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.
So, if only one country will work
for
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in
 the fight against
this
disease
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disease, then
then
this
 problem
can not
can not
cannot
 be tackled. So, all the nations must work together in order to find out the solution of
this
 issue.
Furthermore
, countries can made several organizations in which they should work on several issues.
For example
, when there is war in any
country
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country, then
then
 they take the help of other nations in order to solve their dispute. At the time of war countries take the financial support from other countries. To recapitulate, I would like to write that there are many problems in the world. All the countries must take the help and support of other nations.
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