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Nowadays an increasing number of people are changing their careers during their working life period. What are the reasons behind this trend? Is it generally a positive or negative trend?

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Nowadays people are seen quite often who change their careers as they are obviously starving for making an impact for themselves socially, financially or for other good reasons
such
 as it can be an urge for recognition of his work, creativity or ideas. Most people change their careers in hope of getting a higher raise in salary as it is very difficult to grow professionally in
one
 career or same level of position which have many candidates who are tussling with each other mentally and emotionally with each other to get the final prize which can be an appraisal or promotion. As
one
 course can become ruthless for some people as it does not fulfil the desire of scaling new heights in organisations and lack of recognition of work and self worth is
also
one
 major reason. It can be seen as both positive and negative trends as people often try to fit into
this
 careers who can give them a raise in pay but not a satisfaction of work and self worth in the company so it can impact heavily on the mindset of the people.
On the other hand
 it can become a blessing in disguise for some people who are looking to achieve personal and professional growth by changing their paths totally and it works for them as they are able to see themselves in a right company with their own right attitude
also
. I would like to specifically stress on word "Attitude" as it is
one
 of the major driving forces which decides the direction of growth in a company. Right attitude and the right set of skills can back you anytime in your profession and
one
 can make the most out of it by changing or switching jobs and can fulfil his/her needs personally or professionally. Changing career can
also
 lead to wrong choices at the wrong time which can be a disastrous mistake and can take ages to get a recovery from it. Changing careers in between your current job can be a huge risk as it is like to enter a new football field where all the players are already being championed or at least know their roles and positions given to them and are making a mark for themselves and you have to enter like a substitute and make a permanent position.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career transition
  • technological advancements
  • globalization
  • job dissatisfaction
  • fulfillment
  • purpose
  • lifelong learning
  • continuous education
  • work-life balance
  • health concerns
  • job satisfaction
  • skill diversification
  • versatile
  • employable
  • enhanced creativity
  • financial instability
  • job insecurity
  • stress and uncertainty
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