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An increasing number of people are shopping online. What are advantages and disadvantages for consumer and company?

In
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 day and age, online shopping has brought to the attention of the public. While I accept that
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 trend can have some positive effects on consumers and companies, I believe that they are more likely to have harmful impacts. On the one hand, one of the advantages for consumers of Internet- based purchase is convenience. It is
obviously
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obvious
 that by searching and ordering
a
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an
 online
products
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product
 at homes or workplaces, customers
seems
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seem
 to be
buy
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bought
 easily multitude of items they need.
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 is because customers do not need to stand in queues in cash counters to pay for the products or spend too much time on travelling to shopping malls or supermarkets.
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, frauds in cyber shopping
is
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are
 the drawback for consumers when making online purchases. It is impossible to examine closely desired items,
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, they are probable to receive fake products. The reason is that claims made in advertisements in online shopper spots are probably exaggerated and distorted to overshadow the true functions of commodities.
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, the advantage of e- shopping for companies is saving money. Due to elimination of maintenance, real- estate costs, the retailers are not able to hire a large amount of employee to run businesses.
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 means that it is easier to manage the businesses and make a profit from it.
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, lack of employee who are strong in modern technology like computer is the problem the companies can encounter.
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 is because
employee
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the employee
employees
 will interact with clients from all over the
world be
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world, be
 technological tools
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 as websites or apps like Messenger, Facebook…
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 means these enterprises would require various employees who have
high level
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a high level
 of familiarity with computer skills. In conclusion, online purchasing plays a crucial role in our society,
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however I
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however, I
 believe
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 phenomenon can cause some negative impact on both buyers and companies.

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