You are doing an evening course.Write a letter to the principal of your school and explain that the course that you are taking is slightly different in the way it is delivered from what the school offered. Provide the details of the course Explain what the problem is Give some suggestions to fix the problem

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
letter to express my dissatisfaction with an evening
course
which is being delivered
in
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the school premises. Actually, Sir, a seminar was conducted
in
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the school campus to enhance awareness among the students regarding
the
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extra-curricular activities,
such
as cooking.I took
participation
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in a
course
of
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South Indian cooking.Because I urge to learn the art of their cookery skills. Let me explain in detail the situation.
First
of all, when I attended these classes, our teacher started teaching North Indian food, and
as a result
, when I asked about the description of the
course
.She mentioned that it would be taught
on
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the
last
weekend.
However
, I have already learnt these skills from my mother and grandmother who have
an excellent culinary skills
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excellent culinary skills
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. I would like to suggest you
to
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transfer me to another
course
, which is completely based on the South Indian cuisines because I wish to acquire methods of preparing Idli,
Dokla
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Dhokla

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, and many more.If it would not be possible,
then
please reimburse my
course
fee. Hoping for
a
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considerable action in
this
regard. Yours faithfully, Gurpreet
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