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Governments should spend tax money on public libraries rather than public transportation improvements. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Public transportation development should be given priority by the
government
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 by using the tax money rather the spending more money on public libraries. I do agree that it is more important to spend more budget in the improvement of public transportation because it can less the traffic congestion and provide comfort to commuters.
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, the
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 should spend more amount of money in the improvement of public transport because a good means of transporting will prevent us from congestion and severe traffic in the road,
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, if we have a good and modern kind of transport like the train,
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 will provide the commuters to lessen the used of cars on the road By
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 opportunity the hustle and bustle in the city will be lessened.Aside from publicrailroad transportation, public buses should
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 be given attention by the
government
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 Having the well equip and proper maintained buses willprovide the commuter comfort, agoodinterval of schedule of the trip,
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 will benefits to those people who are not able to drive, they can use
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 means of transportation.
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 the
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 still have to support any concern about the public libraries because it is still need by the public when it comes to education and some research things to do , in whichthey need to access the library To conclude, the governments should spend tax moneyin the improvementto public transport because it will provide the citizen a great comfort to those who are commuting daily and having additional means of
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