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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve them?

#countries #weight #people #levels #health #fitness #measures
To begin
 with, in the 21st century one should stay fit to keep their body in good condition but there very least countries who are facing
problem
 related to
health
 and fitness and due to
this
 the people's average
weight
 has increased a lot and
this
 lead to house of various dangerous
problem
such
 as
health
 issues, stress issues and other various problems.
Firstly
, talking about the developed nation around the world like, let's take an example of the USA. According to an article on "New York times" mentioned that country like the USA is facing lots of
health
 issues and fitness problems too, and according to a survey by their government of that country said that the average
weight
 of mankind has been increasing due to the lifestyle of the people. Humans over there even don't have time to eat proper healthy meal due to their work life so due to
this
 they are mostly dependent on fast-food (burger, pizza and fries) and
this
 has shown various
health
problem
 like a heart attack, cancer issue, skin
problem
 due to not keeping their body fit. There are many measures to solve
this
 kind of trouble, let's discuss in the below paragraph.
Secondly
, we can take different measure to solve
this
 complication
for example
: -Government of some countries who are facing well-being
problem
 can implement a campaign related how to keep our body fit another thing humans over there can do daily exercises to keep them fit and if they are facing
weight
 problems, they can meet a dietician for some
weight
 loss tip. For keeping their mind free from
problem
Suggestion
problems
 they can yoga and other physical activities like cycling in the fresh air.
Lastly
, to conclude there are some nation around the world who are facing various fitness and tonnage problems, but
this
problem
 can be solved easily by changing their lifestyle, doing some exercises and keep their life stress-free.
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  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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