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Since most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, museums are not needed anymore. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, the
internet
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 is used by many people to get
information
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 about the historical site and culture. It is claimed by some people that museums are no longer needed as all the
information
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 is easily available on the
internet
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However, I
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 firmly disagree with
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 idea.
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 with, no one can deny the fact that people cannot physically see the historical sites on the
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. It provides only photos, which most of the time not enough to understand the actual size and beauty of the artefacts or sculptures.
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, In order to gauge the size of the world's biggest sword made in the 19th century, we have to see in person. Since, photos on the screen can never give accurate idea of the size.
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, all the
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 available on the
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 may not be true, as some websites are put up fake
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 for their benefits.
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, museums gives the details, curated by the government and historical experts.
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,
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 will help actual understanding of the historical events.
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, museum's buttress economical development of the city. To explain it in detail, the fees collected from the visitors of the museums improve the revenue of the government. And
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, it acts as an entertainment place for many people.
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, TajMahal in Agra is one of the seven wonders of the world, which attracts millions of tourists every year. It increases the popularity of the country as well as give
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 about the history and culture of the country. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the idea that museums are not needed anymore. In my opinion
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 is never be able to physically show things. Museums provide true representation of the history, culture and religion which would not be possible with the
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