Beside a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Write at least 250 words.

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Some contend that the
internet
has many destructive effects rather than positive impacts. I partially agree with
this
notion since from my perspective the
internet
is useful for individual
people
in many parts of life,
while
it can
also
be harmful if there are some
people
who do not
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it wisely. The merits of the
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internet
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are numerous in different
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fields
files
. In
communication
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field,
people
are able to communicate
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each other easily through social media nowadays.
This
situation even
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allow
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allows
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citizens
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interact
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and strengthen their bonds
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to
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other
people
who live in another country.
Moreover
, in education areas,
people
can get access
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e-learning on their electronic devices.
For example
, teachers can conduct online learning with their students through video conference apps
such
as
zoom
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and
google meet
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. Clearly, by doing
this
people
can enhance their learning
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effectively and efficiently.
Furthermore
, regarding
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environmental development, farmers can have regular weather
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for a month or a year, so that it will help them to predict the best time for growing plants.
However
,
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disastrous effect of the
internet
cannot be neglected.
For instance
, there are some negative cases that come up on social media. Individual
people
sometimes try to make fake
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and post hoax information on their Instagram and Facebook. Unfortunately, others usually cannot differentiate whether the information is true or not. So,
this
condition can result in misunderstanding
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public society, leading to social harassment. In conclusion, I believe that
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of the
internet
are much more than the
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. I advocate that the government should make strict
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on using social media to prevent unintended problems from the
internet
.
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Task Achievement
Make sure to directly address the prompt in your introduction by stating if you agree or disagree to a clear extent; while your position is somewhat given, it's important to be specific in presenting your thesis statement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, with each one discussing a single main point. These should follow a logical order and be relevant to your overall argument.
Task Achievement
Include more specific examples to support your arguments. The ones provided are somewhat generic; offering more detailed, real-life examples would strengthen your essay's impact.
Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Consumer behavior
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  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital footprint
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  • User interface
  • Payment gateway
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