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Some people believe that there should be the death penalty for extremely serious crimes. Others believe that it is not morally correct to kill criminals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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When it comes to homicides, there are two arguments about how murderers must be punished for their criminal acts. One group of people thinks a murderer only deserves the
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, whereas another group believes
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 imprisonment is the best option for them. I agree with the
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 point of view because killing is always an immoral behaviour.
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, those who agree with the
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 affirmation that a guilty person must suffer like a victim.
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, they truly believe in the well-known motto “an eye for an eye, a tooth for a tooth”. According to that, there are massive numbers of places around the world where it is legal to kill criminals.
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, not only does it depend on the country, but
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 on regional laws.
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, in Argentina, it is prohibited while in the United States it is legal in some states.
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, a more conservative group of citizens thinks that killing, even if the victim is a murderer, is an immoral measure.
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 to say, anybody would have the power or decision about human beings’
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 defenders have religious beliefs that are against suffering. For that reason, in countries where religion has a crucial role,
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 is usually illegal. I am totally against killing, and I believe there are other ways to do justice;
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,
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 imprisonment can be the best alternative to avoid new crimes and keep our society safe.
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, in some cases there might be mistakes of judgment in criminal matters. To sum up, there is no doubt that killing is terrible;
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, in some circumstances concerning crimes, it can be justified. One view agrees with the
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, whereas the other is against it. As far as I am concerned, I strongly believe
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 must be respected, and more reasonable punishments for homicides must be found.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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