It is sometimes said that ‘travel broadens the mind’. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In some countries, owning a
house
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rather than renting is very important for people. Do you think
this
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is a positive or negative situation? In recent years, the question of whether the trend of owning a home rather than renting a
house
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has been
received
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receiving
a great deal of public attention.
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this
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trend
also
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has some negative, the upside would be more significant. There are a few cons to
this
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trend.
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, since people want to buy a
house
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, they need to have a large sum of money. Sometimes they borrow from relatives or
bank
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banks
a bank
. In fact, it maybe leads to the risk of bad debt.
Second
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, the
house
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rates will rise up in a long-term till people can’t
affordable
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afford
, especially young or low salary people.
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, in order to have a good place to stay in the long run, people need to invest in a
house
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as soon as possible
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, its imperfectness is inevitably far outweighed by the preeminence.
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, by owning a
house
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, it’s
more economically
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more economical
than renting them in total, since they might not pay for the rent in
long-term
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the long-term
.
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means that,
houseowners
someone who owns a home
homeowners
also
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maybe save more money for something
else
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else, such
such
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as entertainment or investment.
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, if they own a
house
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, they can
easy
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easily
ease
to fixing or decorating houses without permission from others accept
government
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a government
which helps them feel comfortable. In conclusion,
this
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positive will be far more significant than those negative. By considering the pros and cons of owning a
house
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or renting a
house
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, the people should be weighed for money, demand, and possibilities in order to buy or rent.
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