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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on children. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, young children
use
 computers so frequently that some even
use
 them for more than 10 hours every day. Many people believe that the frequent
computer
use
Suggestion
user
 has no harmful effects on young children,
however
 I disagree with
this
 opinion. There is no doubt that there are some negative health consequences of using a
computer
 very often, especially for young people. Physical problems can be caused by spending too much time in front of a
computer
,
such
 as poor eyesight or bad posture from sitting in one position all day.
In addition
, being sedentary can contribute to a lack of exercise and obesity which is clearly a problem among young people these days. An increase in health problems due to a sedentary lifestyle could result in higher health care costs for young people later in life. As well as the physical problems, frequent
computer
use
 can
also
 have a negative impact on social skills. Children who spend a lot of time using computers may not learn how to interact in the real world with real people,
this
 could lead to less friendly and sociable adults. Young people may become more concerned with their scores and progress in games than they are with what happens to them at school or in their jobs. In conclusion, even though technology has some benefits, I believe there are more negative consequences when using a
computer
 every day. Physical and social problems
such
 as poor posture, bad eyesight and lack of social skills can be avoided if computers are used less by the younger generation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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