Some people think that music plays an important role in society. Others think it is simply a form of entertainment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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with, the appearance of
music
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in each and every society has changed a lot. Previously there was not
such
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influence about the
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music but
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music, but
in the 21st era, it has great influence on people. But according to some people thinking that nowadays
music
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plays a marvellous role in the society but there is
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some group of people who thinks that it is just a kind of
entertainment
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. Let's discuss both the view in appropriate manner and give an opinion on it.
Firstly
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, in today's world
music
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has changed a lot and it has great impact on people, long time back there was not
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influence about
music
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which we know now. Lately people were only influenced by classical or traditional type of
music
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and there was no different type of
music
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exists. In our olden days musician uses the very least amount of instruments to form a simple kind of
music
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. An instrument like sitar, flutes were very popular in the olden days, but nowadays many new different instruments have invented and it has great impact on the musician as well as the
music
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industry too. According to some group of people,
music
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plays an important role in the community and yes, it's true, because
music
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has great importance in almost every field like
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: - these day's
music
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is used to cure many diseases like cancer, stress and many other.
Secondly
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, there are
also
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some people who say that it is just a simple form of
entertainment
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. According to their prospective it might be true because usually, people listen to
music
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to refresh themselves or they listen for the
entertainment
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purpose and as claimed by them,
music
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also
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doesn't play an important act in terms of development of a person.
Lastly
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, in my opinion
music
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has a great impact on people, but again, it depends on person to person where they are using it for
entertainment
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purpose or they are using in terms to achieve their goals.
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