Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed by some that the time when they were younger was the happiest period of their lives.

However

, the issue is not entirely straightforward as others contend that despite higher responsibility, some contend that the adults' lives give them more joy.

This

essay will discuss the debate, and give a concluding view. On the one hand, those who think their teenage years were better state that when they were young, they could do the things they liked.

This

freedom brings satisfaction to their daily routines.

Moreover

, they

also

have more time to focus on their self rather than the demands of work or family obligations.

For example

, before they had a family, a person only had expenses usually circling around their self-needed stuff,

such

as cosmetics and fashion.

Hence

, the lack of constraints contributes to a more carefree and enjoyable period of life.

Conversely

, opponents of

this

view point out that adulthood offers a sense of

fulfillment

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and joy

that is

difficult to experience during adolescence.

For instance

, many adults find joy in having a family or in pursuing long-term goals that were not available to them during their younger years.

In addition

, with age comes financial independence, allowing people to enjoy leisure activities and travel, which may have been financially out of reach in their youth.

Overall

, I tend to side with the idea that adult life can bring more happiness to individuals, because they have the financial independence that many people lack in their youth, making it easier for them to pursue bigger dreams

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coherence cohesion

Maintain clear and more precise connections between ideas for smoother transitions between paragraphs and points.

coherence cohesion

The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion.

task achievement

The essay addresses both perspectives of the prompt, showing an understanding of the task.

coherence cohesion

Solid logical structure is apparent, with arguments clearly divided into distinct paragraphs.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

258 words

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