Climate change is the biggest threat to life on our planet. How accurate is this statement? Are there any other bigger threats to menkind?

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Some argue that the

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of the

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is considered one of the biggest issues that humans face on

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. The essay will discuss why I agree with

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statement because I believe that

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problem touches all living creatures,

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, the second risk after

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change

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is wars, since it can destroy a whole country.

Climate

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change

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measures the changes in wind, temperature, and storms over a long period in the globe. It starts to affect the north pole which increases the sea water level,

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, many islands and cities may drown.

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, Maldives country and Venice city are threatened to disappear in the future.

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New York magazine, weather experts advise

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to use public transportation

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of using many cars in order to limit air pollution which makes the weather hotter.

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is one of the causes of

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since it makes the ice melt in both the north and south poles.

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, another threat to humanity is war since it is dangerous and can destroy and kill millions of people.

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, World War 1, it started with a murder case and

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ended with

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great warfare between more than ten countries. The victims of

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conflict were

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more than 100 million people including women, children, and men.

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, it led to insufficient food

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animal deaths, because cows and horses were used to explore bomb places in fields. In conclusion, I agree that

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change

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is a great threat to people's lives,

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, wars are the second threat because it is the reason for communities' deaths in the

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decade.

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Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure a more seamless transition between paragraphs to enhance the overall flow of the essay.

Task Achievement

Expand on the examples provided to fully explore the implications and relevance to the topic.

Task Achievement

Provide a more balanced consideration of other potential threats beyond climate change and wars to strengthen the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion

The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion that frame the discussion effectively.

Task Achievement

Relevant examples, such as the melting ice caps affecting Maldives and Venice, effectively support the main point on climate change.

Coherence and Cohesion

The essay engages with multiple perspectives by discussing both climate change and wars as threats, showcasing depth in analysis.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

273 words

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Climate change is the biggest threat to life on our planet. How accurate is this statement? Are there any other bigger threats to menkind?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Some people believe that the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other private vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?