The given bar charts illustrate the amount of money in million euros which MG Entertainment profited from divergent categories in three European nations in 1997 and 2007.

The given bar charts illustrate the amount of money in million euros which MG Entertainment profited from divergent categories in three European nations in 1997 and 2007.
The given bar charts illustrate the amount of money in
million
euros
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which MG Entertainment profited from divergent categories in three European nations in 1997 and 2007.
Overall
, the company’s earnings generally declined over the period. To be specific, despite a decrease in the incomes from four fields including
CDs
bought from shops, cassettes, vinyl singles and LPs, those
of
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Internet downloads and online
CDs
witnessed a slight growth. As
it
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can be seen that in 1997, the profit from the German spending on purchasing
CDs
from shops was 45
million
euros
, followed by the French and Italian, at exactly € 25 and 20
million
respectively.
By contrast
, the
remainings
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accounted for
the
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small extent of profit with the figures being under € 15
million
among
three
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nations; especially, Internet downloads were hardly allocated for. Over the period,
although
the earnings from shop
CDs
in German, France, and Italy fell dramatically to about 25, 15, and 12 billion
euros
each in 2007, online
CDs
and Internet downloads witnessed an opposite pattern with a slight increase in the figure to approximately 5
million
euros
on average. In general, the two remaining sections were loss-making.
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