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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is increasing the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that the most effective method to address the environmental problems on a global scale is the rising expense of fossil fuels. While some people believed
that is
 the best method to handle these issues, I completely disagree with
this
 statement. On the one hand, I would argue that growing the price of fuel is advantageous in a few aspects.
First
 and foremost, air
pollution
 could witness a substantial decrease.
This
 is because if people switch from private vehicles to public transportation, we would drop dramatically CO2 emissions into the atmosphere.
As a result
, we could mitigate air
pollution
 and enjoy the fresh air on a daily basis. Another benefit is the world would not have to worry about the exhaustion of fossil fuels. Due to the higher expense of fuels, the less people buy and use them. By
this
 way, the government might save a great amount of fossil fuels, which could invest in a lot of facilities
such
 as public service or technological devices to tackle the environmental problems.
On the other hand
, I believed that the drawbacks of
this
 remedy are more significant.
First
 of all,
such
 problems as soil
pollution
 cannot be solved by
this
 way. As we may know, most waste materials are often buried underground in the landfill and
this
 causes soil
pollution
 over the period time.
Such
 problems like
this
 have to resolve via classifying and treating waste material.
In addition
 to
this
, many issues
such
 as deforestation, overhunting, overfishing must be tackled by other solutions.
For instance
, the authority of each nation could enact strict laws or impose green taxes about the environment and those that violate that rule will be heavily punished or fined so they cannot relapse. In conclusion, even though some people argued that
this
 is the most effective method, it seems to me that
this
 remedy merely address some environmental issues on a global scale.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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