There is an annual work party next month, which is held each year. Write a letter to your colleagues to co-arrange the party. In your letter: Say what would you do differently than last year Say what you think were some of the things not so good last year Suggest where to meet to plan for the party

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Dear Mr. Andy Hope
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letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I am writing in connection with the upcoming annual party, which will be held next month.
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last
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year’s party was great, I believe some changes are essential. I suppose we have to invite all the members of the company rather than just focusing on the seniors.
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, we need to find a new music band because The Blue,
that
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always entertain our guests in our ceremonies, will be on a tour on that date. Since the majority of our guests were not satisfied with
food
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the food
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and drinks, and even some got sick, I am planning to change the catering
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year. I think it would be great if we could have a meeting to discuss all the details in advance. If you are available on 10th
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March
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, we can meet at Marina, which is a café next to
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subway station.
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, in case you are not free on that date, please inform me about your schedule and a suitable date. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely Tolan Tolk

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific examples of the issues from last year's party to strengthen your points.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure clarity by clearly outlining the changes you propose in a more structured manner.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a friendly and inviting tone, making it approachable for your colleagues.
complete response
The call to meet at a specific café is a practical suggestion, facilitating the planning process.
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