Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
traffic
safety has always been a point of discussion. There is a viewpoint stating that raising the minimum driving ages is the most effective method to enhance
road
safety. While I accept that
this
may be beneficial to
certain extent
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a certain extent
, I believe that there are many better solutions. Increasing the minimum legal age for driving makes
contribution
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a contribution
to reducing
traffic
accidents, meaning that the
road
will be safer. The reason for
this
is that
road
accidents are often attributed to low awareness of people, especially juveniles who are not mature enough to think deeply and take charge of their actions.
For example
, in Vietnam, there is an increasing number of youngsters who aged from 15 to 18 offending the
traffic
rules like over-speeding, careless driving, running the red light... Which creates
vast number
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a vast number
of
traffic
hazards.
Therefore
, prohibiting young people from driving would be a decent way to inhibit
traffic
problems. From my perspective,
however
,
this
approach only covers some limited aspects due to the fact that these
days many
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days, many
adults still do not abide by the
traffic
laws.
This
can be explained by lack of self-awareness.
Hence
, one way to cope with
this
problem is to have a proper education in order to improve people's knowledge and be responsible for themselves and others when driving, which is conducive to decrease the potential for injury and fatality. Another way is to invest in
traffic
infrastructure, particularly building more
road
signs. To be more precise, planting
traffic
signals provide more warnings,
road
rules for people, helping them to avoid undesirable collisions. In conclusion, I partly agree that imposing a higher legal age for driving would be of help,
however there
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however, there
are some other measures that are superior to
this
solution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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