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People naturally resist making changes run their lives. what kind of problems can this cause? what solutions can you suggest?

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Changes along
life
 period are crucial, some people tend to adapt to changes easily,
however
 there are others who struggle making changes.
Consequently
, they might face some problems. Sometimes changes are necessary despite of how difficult and challenging it is. Some circumstances in
life
 can get worse if changes do no take place. It seems that some people live their daily
life
 knowing the danger involve in their behaviours and habits.
For instance
, people who smoke daily are at great risk of getting cancer in several organs,
however they
Accept comma addition
however, they
 keep smoking everyday regardless of how harmful
this
 habit is for the health.
In addition
,
although
 people are aware of the damage that junk food does, they keep buying and eating it.
As a result
, their bodies deal with obesity, heart diseases and blood pressure problems which can lead to dead.
This
 is the outcome when people keep doing the same without commit any important changes.
However
, there are some approaches which foster people make changes in their
life
. If people start making changes progressively it might be easier for them to accomplish changes. Some people cannot just stop smoking suddenly, they need to find out some special methods for that and the consequences that their
life
 will face if they keep smoking. Professional help is needed to accomplish the changes, people should visit psychologists to get a proper way to start making changes.
For example
, those who are in drug might find really difficult to stop consuming by themselves, whereas if they find professional help it might be less complicated. In conclusion,
although
 making changes are tough, people should start by making small changes in order to avoid any
life
 issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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