People in the community can buy cheaper products nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

It is a well-known fact that consumer goods have been increasingly cheaper in recent years. Despite some obvious benefits associated with
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phenomenon, they fail to justify the overwhelming flaws. On the one hand, there are two primary advantages to the greater affordability of existing product lines.
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since more and more people can
afford now
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basic necessities, living standards have vastly improved. In fact, many households are able to currently purchase
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a television
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and
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a refrigerator
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that meet their needs for entertainment and food storage.
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when commodities are offered at lower prices, public purchasing power is boosted
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drives economic growth. With
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a prosperous
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economic
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,
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is well-placed to collect more taxes and invest
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money in key fields,
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as education and healthcare.
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, the glaring drawbacks of the rise of low-priced
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far outweigh these aforementioned positives. By using cheaper quality products, the public risks compromising their well-being. Some manufacturers are likely to resort to
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substandard materials and skipping many steps in the production process as a way to cut costs, resulting in lower safety levels for consumers.
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, if the trend towards affordable items is accelerated,
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exploitation will
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. In China’s emerging sweatshop,
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, underpaid workers have to work long hours in appalling working
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to produce ever-cheaper garments and electronic gadgets. In conclusion, society as a whole has more to lose than gain from the cheapening of goods.
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,
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development is almost inevitable, given the present emphasis on catering for growing consumption demands and achieving economic
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task
Be clear on your view from start to end. The first paragraph should state the idea, and the last should agree with it.
structure
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Start with a topic sentence then add proof.
content
Give more clear proof. Use real and clear examples that fit the point you make.
language
Fix grammar and word use. Some phrases are not right, like 'prosperous economic' or 'will rampant'. Use simple and correct forms.
structure
The essay checks both sides of the topic, which helps form a view.
cohesion
There are linking words like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' that help flow.
content
A real example is used about sweatshops, which adds weight to the point.

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