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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasing common. Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages?

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Today, the booming of technology gives rise to people with many conveniences, including using applications integrated into smart phones to pay bills, the mobile banking or e-commerce trade. In my opinion, despite some drawbacks of these services,
this
 growth creates more benefits to users. On the one hand, it is undeniable that people have a tendency to be over-dependence on commercial apps of the high-tech gadgets in order to meet their personal needs,
such
 as interacting with their relationships or entertainment demands due to the fact that
such
 apps provide them with more choices and save their time.
However
, these applications could consider as an indirect culprit of the sedentary lifestyle, which means users,
instead
 of going to shopping malls to purchase any items, they shop at online stores and
then
 delivery companies will ship products to them.
Therefore
, the price of goods would be more expensive than they buy at the retails.
On the other hand
, I strongly believe that customers, application writers and service providers as well as governments would reap certain benefits from
this
 development.
Firstly
, software developers who make applications obtain the great amount of money from the copyright and the annual subscriptions.
As a result
, they could make a contribution to the national budget through the tax system. Thanks to
this
 fund, the authorities can allocate for investing in the public fields, especially education, the welfare or infrastructure.
Secondly
, millions of jobs for the workforce serving in the relevant areas, namely the transportation service, sellers and staff of companies that supply the online markets, would be created. Perhaps,
this
 leads to minimizing the unemployment rate,
thus
, shoulder the burden of the government which use to subside for
this
 group.
For example
, there are several nations in which the software industry plays a backbone role in the economy, India
in particular
. In
this
 nation, many giants with customers on a global scale, possess many IT elites and specialize in writing games, softwares or designing websites, made millions of works for employees and add billions dollars in the budget of the Indian government. In conclusion, it seems to me that in spite of a few disadvantages of
this
 trend, its advantages are more significant.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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