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Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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Information technology is becoming a ubiquitous part of learning.
This
 essay will show that
this
 is a welcome development and can enhance educational practice. It will
first
 suggest that the instant availability of huge amounts of information is the primary advantage, followed by a discussion of how it can sometimes lead to plagiarism. The main benefit computers bring to learners is easy
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access to vast amounts of resources. Learners were once limited to the books they had and the knowledge of their teacher, now they can learn about anything they choose at the touch of a button. Google is a prime example
,
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because it allows people to easily search for whatever they are looking for quickly and accurately. One possible drawback is that using the internet to complete academic work can sometimes lead to pupils copying articles from the internet.
As a result
, students do not have to think about their tasks and learn very little. The Sunday Times recently reported that 72% of college graduates in the UK admitted to copying and pasting Wikipedia articles at least once. Overall, it is a very positive development because most students will take advantage of the power of the information superhighway to enhance their studies, rather than using it to cheat.
For example
, in 2005 Cambridge University found that students who regularly used a computer were 26% more likely to get a
first
-class degree than those who did not. In conclusion, the web has provided a gateway to knowledge unlike anything seen before and
although
 it can sometimes lead to a few taking the easy route and plagiarising, it is a very positive step in the evolution of education.
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