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All children should be given a free laptop when they start high school. Do you agree or disagree?

#children #laptop #school
It is frequently said that children should be provided with modern devices,
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omputer, as soon as they start secondary education.
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 statement because it should
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 to modernize the educational system and it
also
 could lead children to develop an ability to deal with technology in future. The necessity of
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 education is related
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 the digital widespread era. Researches in Brazil have identified that most of
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razilian schools that could not provide digital structure or
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 for their students were frequently
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 than the schools that have those features. To develop skills in any matter is a long term process. Sooner the students have access to digital machines more they will be able to perform or attend the requirements of
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abour market in the future. The magazine Tech Life has released an article which defends that people used to take 2 to 4 years to completely achieve proper knowledge with modern technology devices. To summarize, all children should receive a free laptop,
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 because it provides the school
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a modernizing model of teaching and
also
 because
this
 is a skill that could benefit students in their future career.
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