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Some people think that children should not be given homework everyday, while others believe that they must get homework everyday in order to be successful at school. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #children #homework #school
While having daily assignments can improve the chances of getting good grades, children can
also
 feel overwhelmed with
homework
 overload. I believe that they have been asked to do more than they should when it comes to
homework
.
First
 of all, children development is not limited to academic activities. They should have plenty of
time
 to play with friends and stay connected with their families. Parents must emphasize the importance of
time
 management for the young ones. There is
time
 to sleep, to have meals, to have
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hower, to watch TV, to practice sports, and to study. No primary activity should take the
time
 of others, often considered secondary.
For instance
, have fun.
On the other hand
, parents are having less
time
 to stay with their sons due to the long shifts at work and the
time
 spent in the traffic. In
this
 way, kids start to choose
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their own how much
time
 they will spend between video-games and
homework
.
In other words
, if they are not kept busy with assignments, they will probably spend all their
time
 with TV shows, YouTube and video-games.
Also
, as parents are not able to watch closely their
homework
, teachers are getting more responsibility
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 children education, and daily
homework
 is a good way to keep
then
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 focused. I strongly believe that parents must be aware of all aspects of their children education.
This
 includes,
for instance
, being present at school meetings, getting to know how often and what kind of
homework
 the students need to do and support them with these activities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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