Modern lifestyles mean that many parents have little time for their children. Many children suffer because they do not get as much attention from their parents as children did in the past. Do you agree or disagree?

Modern lifestyle is one of the big issues in

this

century. Since lifestyle has been changed and job tasks are very demanding, our attention to children has been diminished.

Therefore

, it is very common to see children that feel lonely or maybe try to get attention for their parents by making problems.

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of all, children are

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ig asset for every parent.

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, not every parent knows the children's need. They

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likely to abandon their child rather than leave their duties in work for a

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.

However

,

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trend makes some disadvantages for children. One problem is mental health. Children that likely to be alone has to bear the problems by theirself, it means they have to manage their feelings.

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habit will lead to mental health,

such

as depression. The reason behind

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is because they do not have a place to tell their story at home, a place

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full of advice and trustworthy people

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Moreover

, in another case, children that have the tendency to make trouble can cause horrible mistakes,

such

as juvenile delinquencies. In another way, it can cause more serious effect,

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children are jailed due to illegal activities that they have done.

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, it may stake their future. On the other side,

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loneliness that accompanies children every single day will develop independence.

Furthermore

, it will help to have self-confidence. Since they have nobody to lay on, they have to be a reliable person at least for herself.

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likely to show his/her interest in a particular area related to psychology. In doing so, they can motivate others that feel loneliness is

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a bad idea and change it to be a positive motivation.

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his case is really rare, but there is no impossible way to find

this

case. In a nutshell, I would like to say that I disagree with the notion of leaving children alone without enough attention.

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it has benefits, the drawbacks are so much more common in our society. In the end, there are many children

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uffer from loneliness in

this

century rather than in the past that need to be fixed.