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You work for an international company. You are celebrating for a special family even and you would like to have a time off for it. Write a letter to your boss

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I am writing to make a formal request to you. I am wondering if I could take a
couple
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 days off to go to travel to meet my family because we will celebrate my parents’ anniversary. It will be a very special date for us, once my mother and my father will hold a party
in
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on
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 a beautiful farm with all their friends and family.
This
 celebration will start on Friday evening and it will
last
 the whole weekend.
However
, I am planning to live on Thursday, December 1st, because I will have to travel for several hours and I want to be in my hometown on Friday morning to assist my parents with the
last
 arrangements to make sure the party will be perfect the way we all have planned. In these two days that I will be away, I will be checking my emails and answering my phone to assist my colleagues in everything they need. I am
also
 planning to inform them
all
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 the work that
need
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needs
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 to be done, which is just a few because we will not be in the closing period. I really appreciate
if
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it if
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 you could give me these days off because I really want to be with my family in
this
 extraordinary moment of their life.
Submitted by Nayara Rastelli on

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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