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As people live longer and longer, the idea of cloning human beings in order to provide spare parts is becoming a reality. The idea horrifies most people, yet it is no longer mere science fiction. To what extent do you agree with such a procedure? Have you any reservations?

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The cloning of animal has been occurring for a long time.
However
, due to advancement in science and technology, human cloning is no more science fiction. Even though
such
 artificial human creation has myriad of advantages in terms of spare organ donation to expand people’s life span, few people still feel it’s against the ecosystem. In my view, I believe
this
 phenomenon is certainly fantastic for the scientific experiment but not well suitable for overall life balance. To elaborate cloning, it is a process which involves creating an exact replica of any living thing’s DNA and forming an egg from it, which needs to be implanted into another living mammal for birth.
Such
 experiments are extremely dangerous and the success rate is sparse.
For example
, the world-famous
first
 mammal cloning of ship named Dolly, which was unsuccessful for more than 250 trials. Aforementioned information reveals that conducting cloning consist
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technical problems, huge cost and the thin possibility of success. Apart from
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echnical perspective, reproduction of human cells and tissues brings in the ethical dilemma of creating a human being.
This
 might form a gigantic risk in terms of security
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 since two or more persons have the same fingerprints.
Moreover
, what about cloned people’s human rights, as they have the same mental and emotional sensation as human beings.
In addition
, giving birth to artificial human with a purpose to gain organs and killing them once it is solved, is considered a crime in almost all religion text. In conclusion, animating life is the most mystic power of God.
Although
 it will be beneficial for certain purposes, it is against nature and involves selfishness of humankind
thus
 morally unacceptable.
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