Some people think young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others think that they should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Tradition
is the virtual values that had been pass through generation, from the oldest to the youngest. Some people think that
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oung generation should follow the traditional values. Meanwhiles, others argue that they need to have a
free style
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of behaviour. From my perspective.
Although
having the freestyle of behaviour is one of the best way to adapt with modern environment,
preservating
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preserving
preservation
and following the
tradition
values can teach a well-mannered
lesson
for individuals On the one hand, the
tradition
is the old
lesson
and experience from the previous people earned and improved so it has it owns moral advantages. To be specific, these values can bring a source of manner
lesson
and teach you how to have well-behaved to other people.
For example
, in my country, children from 3 years old are taught to respect other people from the older to younger ones.
This
will make a strong connection in their family and
also
in their social life.
On the other hand
, some people argue that children should be free to behave.
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is because
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oung generation is living in the modern world which is surrounding by technology and science,
this
completely different from the previous time and ancient people, so the old culture and outdated
tradition
will not suitable.
Furthermore
, if the children follow the
tradition
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way too much, it can be hard for them to adapt
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the
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environment.
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, children are more flexible with technology lead to gain knowledge about the world and adapt
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the change easily than the previous people. In conclusion. the young need to make a decision and have a freestyle in behaviour. Traditional values can give them
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good
lesson
about manner but they should collect what is the ones suitable
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