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supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas.What are your opinions on this?

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Convenience stores Import all kinds of product from overseas,
such
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 as vegetables, diaries, canned
food
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, which are sold by these stores
instead
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 of their local
food
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 and there are multifarious drawbacks of it as well as some benefits are considered toward it. I will discuss my point of view with examples in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, supermarkets provide us
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various kinds of product, which are produced in foreign countries and lead to
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isappearance of their local
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.
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, Grocery stores import all the
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 from another country and some of them are canned
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, which is different from their local
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, so youngsters like to consume prepared
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 as they do not have
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time to make meals.
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, they forget their traditional
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 and do not even know how to make it.
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, they love to eat western
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such
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 as hamburgers, bread, pasta, which is unhealthy for us if we consume it regularly.
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, if supermarkets sell residential
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,
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 they will bring many positive sides For their area.
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, selling local
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 will lead to reducing the number of unemployment as people will expand their farm and hire workers to produce fresh vegetables and healthy
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, coming generations will aware about their traditional
food
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 if we preserve it now as well as they will eat a healthy meal
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 of unhealthy overseas products.
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, these markets do not have to spend extra financial costs to purchase foreign
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 products.
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, they can buy
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 at low cost and sell them at
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igh price if they give
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 priority to their own
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. In conclusion, investing money on local
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 has many advantages for supermarkets and their residents as they are considered safe to eat because they are sold on the same time when they are brought from farms, so they are healthy to eat as compared to canned products.
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