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Some people believe that children should not be given homework, while others believe that they must get homework everyday in order to be successful at school. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that doing
homework
 can help their children to learn better
however
 there are few who think
otherwise
. In
this
 essay, we will discuss both the perspectives. Parents have
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raditional mindset that they think, children can acquire knowledge by practising the lessons which they learnt in school by doing the
homework
. In fact, they point out many research articles which confirms the same.
Additionally
,
this
also
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 an opportunity for the parents to know their children’s ability and concentration to learn.
Also
, it will help the children to concentrate on the subjects which they are lacking behind.
Furthermore
, teachers opine that
homework
 not only
help
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 the children to stay connected with the learnings but
also
 teaches discipline and punctuality.
In contrast
, few parents suspect that
homework
 can be a burden in children life and increase their stress level. These parents support their ideas with the statistics, where many children around the world are pushed into depression due to their inability to complete the assigned
homework
 on time.
As a result
, a child can feel inferior to other children who completes the tasks. Parents consider that 8 hours of formal school education is more than enough for children to learn and
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emaining time can be spent productively by learning new hobbies and connecting with the family. To conclude, there should be a balance between studies and social life for children. In my opinion, I believe that formal school education is good enough for learning the subjects and remaining time must be utilized for developing hobbies, sports, and social bond.
Submitted by Srinithi Ramesh on

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