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Living in big cities is bad for health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cities #health
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Nowadays more people are becoming urbanized by migrating to big cities from rural areas.
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 it is believed by some that living in these big cities have many detrimental effects on peoples' health, in my opinion, I disagree with
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. By living in town areas, people can have a large number of opportunities and facilities which are impossible for them who live in villages.
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, big towns have many facilities available
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 as hospitals, recreational spaces etc. which rural areas do not have.
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, one can avail all the necessary things that he needs to lead a healthy life.
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, many researchers have proved that the number of death is nearly 25% more in villages than cities because of the lack of proper treatment.
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, city people can get immediate help or treatments by doctors if they are sick,
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, they do not die without proper treatment like the people in small towns.
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, the people living in town areas are prone to get higher
education
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 in comparison with the village dwellers.
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, someone who has a higher educational degree i s offered with a prestigious job,
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also
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 available in urban areas.
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, in recent time, more people of villages are migrating to big cities in search of better jobs and
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. By living in city areas, one can easily avail higher
education
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 and
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, get a good job. To conclude, though some people think that living in big towns is injurious to health, it is totally a negative thought and spending life in these urban areas help people to get the
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 and treatment they need and
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 ensures a prosperous life.
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