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With a growing population, many people believe that we should focus on producing more genetically modifies food. what are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this?

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The increase in population around the world has lead to the rise in the concern related to accommodation , economy etc. The
food
 should be manufactured in laboratories to fulfil the requirement of pupils is always been debated.
This
 essay will discuss various pros and cons of man-made nutrient.
Firstly
, underdeveloped country's major concern is malnutrition. As per the survey conducted by the UN in December 2010, there are 76% of children who does not get a balanced diet every day. The draught, deforestation has lead to less productive agricultural land which in turn resulted in less
food
 availability. The genetically modifies
food
 can be manufactured in
such
 developing countries to solve the problem of poor diet.
Secondly
, if there will be an expansion in the industries for the manufacturing of bioengineered substances
then
 there will be
a
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 increase in the prices of the meal. Since the cost of machines, as well as raw material, would get involved. The common people would not be able to afford laboratory-made
food
. The demand for natural resources would be decreased due to genetically modified
food
 availability.
Thirdly
, the by-products released by the factories would be a prime cause of the increase in pollution. The chemically altered products will not only pollute their, water and soil but
also
, indirectly will enter the
food
 chain. In the years between 1999 to 2009, there was an elevation in the pollution due to companies releasing pollutants in the environment. The disorders caused by the altered genes will affect the current generation as well as
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uture generation. In conclusion, there are far more disadvantages of genetically modified
food
 than advantages. There are other alternatives of the modified
food
 which can be taken under the account to fulfil nutritional requirements.
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