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With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animal? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

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The globalisation, industrialisation has resulted in a negative impact on the living as well as non-living things of the earth. Whether an animal's
life
 is important or not is always debatable.
This
 essay will discuss the possible solution to protect an animal's
life
.
Firstly
, the animal's
life
 is the prime part of the food chain. The food chain initiates as well as end with the animals. Animals are an inseparable part of the earth. It is our duty to protect
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ife of every living being. Due to expansion in the industrialisation, there is an increase in the deforestation. The raw material for the production is taken from the forest. The natural environment of animals is being destroyed.
Secondly
, the animals are well of in the natural habitat than in the artificial zoo created by humans. The possible solution for
this
 issue would be the construction of the animal
sanctuary
. The
sanctuary
 will provide the necessary surrounding for their living.
Also
, the government should impose rule and regulation regarding human activities in the
sanctuary
.
In addition
, the
sanctuary
 should
also
 consist of on-call veterinary doctor for the health check-ups of the animals.
Thirdly
, the endangered animals should be monitored closely and
also
 special habitat can be erected for their survival. As per the survey conducted by the UN in the arctic region, there is a decrease in the number of polar bears by 78% in
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ast 10 years.
This
 happened due to an increase in global warming. The ice of the arctic region is melting at the lightening speed resulting in rising water level. In conclusion, it is our constitutional duty to protect all the species of the earth and various measures like animal
sanctuarys
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sanctuary
sanctuaries
 and natural habitat should be maintained.
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