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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. why do you think this is the case? is this a good thing or a bad thing?

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Many people appreciate wearing stylish outfits. Modern fashion has taken over society so I think
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 is why people like to look good. I will agree with
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 essay that it is a beautiful thing to adorn in a fashionable way because looking great brings about courage and respect. It is agreed that most people have
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assion to ensemble up in gorgeous outfits. Most people lack
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ourage to address people especially if they are not well dressed, the aura for approaching others will be low while people who are gorgeously dressed will like to show off their look and pass a message to other with full bravery without having to worry about what people will say. A final year project of a sociology student in
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niversity of Lagos proves that 70% of people have more poise when they wear fashionable clothes. A lot of people are believed to appreciate being well dressed. Respect is earned in these part of the world, looking great is good business which entails fancy things. When an individual is greatly dressed, the person is respected amongst all.
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, when attending a function in Lagos, you have to be fashionably dressed if not you might not gain entrance into the event venue. In conclusion, quite a lot of people have
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assion to suit up stylishly. I agree to these because I believe looking great brings a lot of courage in our interaction with people, and
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, it brings about respect from people towards the individual.
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