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Some people believe that the government should spend more money putting in more works of art like paintings and statues in cities to make them better places to live in.

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Some feel governments should invest more in public
art
 in cities to boost the quality of life. Personally, I am in disagreement with
this
 idea because it has little actual importance for the average citizen. On the one hand, public
art
 beautifies a
city
. A
city
 stripped of all
art
 gives off the dreary appearance of being purely for utilitarian value and the daily rigour of work.
In contrast
, cities that have invested heavily in public
art
,
such
 as New York
City
, offer their residents a beautiful and inspiring home. A child who sees sculptures and murals working home will feel the
city
 is a nicer place to live and workers passing by works of
art
 will have some emotional relief from the demands of the day.
This
 not only builds up the character of urban areas for local inhabitants and
instills
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 a sense of pride, but
also
 attracts tourists and professional artists to the
city
, both of which contribute to a vibrant
city
.
Nonetheless
, public
art
 has little quantifiable positive value. Most
city
-dwellers are too engrossed in their hectic schedules to notice public
art
.
This
art
,
therefore
, means nothing to most locals, while
also
 diverting an outsized share of a
city
’s budget. There are other more vital areas requiring development
such
 as high-end infrastructure, well-rounded healthcare systems, and modern recreational facilities.
Moreover
, the public space used to house these works of
art
 cannot be used for practical purposes including critical public facilities like restrooms, bus stops or parks. Those who rely on these other facilities will have more trouble finding them and their quality of life may be somewhat impacted by a preference for
art
. Despite the aesthetic value of public
art
, government bodies should focus more on urban issues that truly matter to their constituents. There must be a degree of balance but it should always tip more towards pragmatic concerns.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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