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Countries with long average working hours are economically more successful than those countries which do not work long hours. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that nations with extended working shifts are more prosperous than those which do not encourage overtime. In my opinion, long working hours are not sufficient to make a country economically strong, and
hence
 I completely disagree with the argument. There are countries which believe that working more hours will increase their productivity and enable them to boost their
economy
. Nations mainly engaged in the manufacturing of goods and services expect their employees to
work
 overtime so that they can complete their assignments on time and get more jobs for their people. Asian countries like China whose
economy
 is majorly based on
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anufacturing of cheap goods and services expect their employees to
work
 round the clock. Overall, with the availability of extra hours from the manual workforce
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some countries are able to push their
economy
 towards development While on the other side, there are countries which do not believe in extending the
work
 hours and still they are successful. The
economy
 of
such
 nations is not solely dependent on the manual workforce. With the help of technology and the highly qualified staff
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they are able to achieve their targets within the stipulated timeframe and
hence
 they do not encourage overtime. In most of the western countries like the USA, with the availability of efficient and highly trained staff
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there is no need for the companies to push their employees beyond their normal working hours. On the whole, the countries with adequate resources and technological advancement are able to flourish with normal working hours. Countries that prefer long working hours are not the only successful ones. Nowadays, success depends not only on extended
work
 hours but
also
 on the infrastructure and availability of skilled resources.
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