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People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 modernized and westernized world
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people are enjoying their
life
 more as compared to ancient
time
 because of the advancement of technology and other facilities in their
life
.In my perspective,I completely agree with the aforementioned statement and my viewpoints on
this
 issue will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
 with, during the ancient
time
 there were limited modes of transportation,so people used to go by bicycle or by foot,but these days they have more facilities
such
 as cars ,buses and trains,so they can easily travel from one place to another and meet relatives.
This
 process has changed the entire
life
 of the people .It has made the
life
 of people more convenient and comfortable.In ancient
time
,there were fewer sources of communication people used to spread their messages through pigeons ,but these days because of the introduction of mobile phones have entirely revolutionized the communication process.
Moreover
,in olden
time
 period
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there were few appliances in the kitchen,so it was very difficult for women to work in the kitchen,but these days there is the availability of all type of electronic appliances,so it has made the
life
 of women easy as compared to ancient
time
. To recapitulate,I would like to write that people have a much better
life
 as compared to ancient
time
 because of the various amenities in their
life
.
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