You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level.

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Dear Sir, My name is jazzy. I am writing in connection with a walking tour in the mountains which I saw in a pamphlet yesterday. I am very enthusiastic to join

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trip but I have not been feeling well for a few days so I was worrying that I will be able to make it or not. Actually, I am fond of mountains and I have found it more interesting because

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walk so we can take breaks in between. I was wondering if you can give some information about specific dates.

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, what will be the cost for

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one-week tour?

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, I have no prediction of what will be the climate there if you can share that as well. Unfortunately, I got my knee hurt during running two weeks ago. Now I am feeling a little better but I am thinking if I will be able to keep up there or not. I feel more pressure while climbing up. I would really appreciate

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you can provide me with some information so I can get myself prepared for

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wonderful tour. I really do not want to miss

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chance. I look forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Jazzy

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

206 words

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