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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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 with, in the 21st century many things has changed a lot like, various development been happening, education system has changed and various other things too. According to survey by various government organization of a particular country, have stated that many people are choosing or they are more focused towards living alone theseday's as compared to they are living in the past. These type of situation might have caused due to various types of problems or it could be anything. Let's discuss
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. To start with, in some countries, many people nowaday's are choosing to living alone as compared in the past. These type of situation has various impact on the
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 if they are living alone, it might be a positive or negative development.
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 let's talk about positive impact on the people who are living alone,
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: - If someone is living alone or living away from the family he or she might can learn new thing or they can develop their mind for their better furture because they have lot's of free time,
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 if a student is living alone in other place they have various thing to do and they can utilize thing time in a good way. kjsgjkdsjkcdsjkcbjkw
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, if certain people are choosing to live alone the
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 might face various negative development too.
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: - if someone is living alone and they have lot's of stress due to their workload or other family problem they might started drinking alcohol or do various drugs to relive for sometime, due to
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 kind of habits they will face certain challanges and lead to bad negative impact on the body. Another thing is
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 some
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 is living alone they might feel lonely and
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 can lead to a depression problem.
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, in my opinion, according to me
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 type of challanges occur in everybody's life but it always depend's on
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 to
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 how they are dealing with
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 kind of problem.
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