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Some people believe that exploring other planets is a waste of money. Others feel that more money should be spent on it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the contemporary era, governmental allocation of substantial tax revenues to space
exploration
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, particularly in developed nations, has become a prevalent phenomenon.
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 trend,
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, sparks considerable debate regarding its justification. Critics contend that interplanetary
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 constitutes
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 misallocation of public funds. Their
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 stems from the limited tangible returns despite decades of astronomical
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; fundamental questions about extraterrestrial life and the universe's nature remain largely unanswered. The opportunity cost appears particularly stark when contrasted with persistent terrestrial challenges—global poverty, educational disparities, and inadequate healthcare infrastructure. Redirecting these astronomical budgets toward addressing
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 pressing humanitarian issues would undoubtedly yield more immediate and demonstrable benefits for earthly inhabitants.
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, advocates maintain that expanding our cosmic footprint represents a crucial
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 in humanity's future. The innate human drive for discovery, an enduring quality that has propelled civilizational progress throughout history, finds its ultimate expression in space
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. Beyond philosophical
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, practical imperatives lend weight to
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 pursuit. The potential acquisition of rare extraterrestrial resources could alleviate growing resource scarcity on Earth,
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 contact with advanced
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—should any exist—might provide transformative insights into managing global crises ranging from pandemics to climate change. In conclusion,
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 I acknowledge the compelling arguments against cosmic expenditure, I firmly believe sustained
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 in planetary
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 is justified. The potential gains in scientific knowledge and resources present unparalleled opportunities for addressing existential challenges.
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, a nuanced approach is essential
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 developed nations should continue leading
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 developing economies might reasonably
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 domestic welfare, calibrating their
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 in space
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 their socioeconomic circumstances.

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Your task answer is clear. Say your view at the start and keep it in the end to show a strong stance.
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Discuss both sides well, but add one or two real or easy facts or examples to back each point.
coherence cohesion
Keep ideas in order. Use one idea per paragraph and use easy linking words like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'however', 'for example', 'in conclusion'.
coherence cohesion
Some phrases are long. Shorten some lines and use simple sentences to stay easy to read.
organization
Clear choice of view and a balanced talk on both sides.
cohesion
Good use of connection words to move ideas.
tone
The ending states a clear opinion.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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