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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
The equal number of students in universities should be admitted in every subject. I agree with
this
 statement because I believe education is for everybody regardless what race, status and sex as well. Many people want equality in every aspect of our life is essential. If all university will receive an influx of
student
 whatever
gender
 they have
then
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acism issue will be ruled out. Education is limitless as long as you are capable and able to
further
 your knowledge. Being a co-ed school will increase the diversity of every
student
 and
to
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meet different orientation in their daily lives.
Also
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student
 with different sexes could expand their experience on how to deal with different sexes. An example of
this
 was my previous college days where most of my friend are mixed
gender
. We have to have the ability to interact with them. Students must be exposed
in
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 the reality of life
thus
 male and female are working together in one environment.
On the other hand
, being an exclusive school has
also
 a better alternative. Some
student
are
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 more comfortable in
same sex
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 classmate because they have
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ame personalities and styles. They are more discipline that those mixed
gender
 school. One studies
shows
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 that pupils with
same sex
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 ambience are more boring than mixed
student
 because female are
more dull
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 than male Male students are more adventurous than female. In conclusion, I suppose
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niversity should admit mixed
gender
 students so that they will be exposed
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 the reality of life. Being able to
interaction
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 with
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iversity of people would make us feel good.
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