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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The equal number of students in universities should be admitted in every subject. I agree with
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 statement because I believe education is for everybody regardless what race, status and sex as well. Many people want equality in every aspect of our life is essential. If all university will receive an influx of
student
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 whatever
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 they have
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acism issue will be ruled out. Education is limitless as long as you are capable and able to
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 your knowledge. Being a co-ed school will increase the diversity of every
student
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 and
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meet different orientation in their daily lives.
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student
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 with different sexes could expand their experience on how to deal with different sexes. An example of
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 was my previous college days where most of my friend are mixed
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. We have to have the ability to interact with them. Students must be exposed
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 the reality of life
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 male and female are working together in one environment.
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, being an exclusive school has
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 a better alternative. Some
student
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 more comfortable in
same sex
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 classmate because they have
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ame personalities and styles. They are more discipline that those mixed
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 school. One studies
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 that pupils with
same sex
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 ambience are more boring than mixed
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 because female are
more dull
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 than male Male students are more adventurous than female. In conclusion, I suppose
u
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niversity should admit mixed
gender
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 students so that they will be exposed
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 the reality of life. Being able to
interaction
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 with
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iversity of people would make us feel good.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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